Dream Deep

I'm... not sure you get much across with this. The imagery was pretty nice, but overall it did not have a feel that made you want to read it again ...

I actually found this quite nice, Soldier. It flowed well and I thought you made excellent use of the repetition. Only one thing, here, in the last stanza: He sat ...

Ah yes, the prologue is already significantly cut down and rewritten, I merely haven't changed it here. The second person, too, is demolished -- as are a good deal of ...

Heh, thank you very much Cicero, but there's one little hitch to your plan - ahem. I'm homeschooled. ;) And 15. Hence the online college courses until 17 and the ...

Contes de nos Jours by Andre Therive.... written entirely in French, so that's interesting. ;)

Like Myth, things begin happening that want to be put to paper when I'm supposed to be, or about to, fall asleep. !_! Though every now and then, half-awake in ...

Nice thought, Cal, but quite confusing. Either that or I truly am not meant to be a poet, but I was rather lost throughout... ;)

*is mesmerised...* O.O -- Jack! You changed your theme! Bring back the gladiatorial games! ;)

Oh look. I'm on the red line. -_-

But these... [] ... are 'braces'. ;)

Hmmm... nice imagery, but this doesn't flow right. I'd advise getting rid of the second "Frost" in Stanza 1. And the last bit needs some work too, it ends on ...

It's restrictive here? o.O

Paradise Lost by John Milton (... still awaiting the Chesterton... )

Love is eternal - if you truly, deeply love someone, no matter what happens I think a small part of you will always love them. Or maybe I'm just hopelessly ...

Beautiful, Crysi. ^_~ And sweet. I wish I could write poetry on the spot half as well as you... and because it's for Jack it's extra special. ^_^